There once was a force more than others,
Much stronger than sisters or brothers,
Her love was so right,
Her arms held you tight,
Let's hear it for all those great mothers!
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Can I suggest one more beat in lines 1,2 and five and you will have perfect iambic pentameter
LenHazell53
Level 9
May 13, 2018
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@Silverwhisper
I know, but since since you were going 9,9,5,5,9 anyway, I thought the transition from pseudo Limerick to Pentameter was worth pointing out, simply as a courtesy as a classic Limerick is 8,8,5,5,8 so perhaps lose a beat from 1,2,and 5?
Good luck.
I wish that I could feel as good about being a mother! Today seems more focused on what should have been, instead of what was!
Freedompath
Level 9
May 13, 2018
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@Silverwhisper Whenever I did something questionable, I'd think, "Well, that's another story for her therapist."
@Silverwhisper Whenever I did something questionable, I'd think, "Well, that's another story for her therapist."