The length of the description of the ending of the event is directly related to the length of the build up.

Thanks for the link. Some really great images.

What is wonderful is enough people read those bits for them to make the worst list.

Is this a great world or what?

I found the same problem. I commited to writing 10 stories in 10 weeks (a few years ago) got through 5 before i split with the client. (Ghostwriting gig) i tried to entwine characters from each story with the next . Like a doorman at a hotel lusting over guest; then he showed up at sex museum; whose clerk went home to watch neighbors through window.... Each one a different story. The repetition in the details were intellectually cumbersome. I am currently unemployed and there is an erotic salon in philly. I was thinking about revisiting the genre just to get some word time in and maybe make some new friends? Don't really have any advice, just saying you're bot alone.

oh an addendum to my previous comment: it's not impossible, actually. read ragtime by doctorow. there is erotica in there that isn't porn. then read sophie's choice by styron. some of those chapters are intended to be erotica. they're not. they're porn. they're also irrelevant to the story. styron did his otherwise really fine novel a disservice. the movie wisely left those chapters out.

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when i glommed onto the tv series quantum leap, i had also just glommed onto the internet and found i was not alone in liking the show. i discovered then that there was such a thing as fan fiction, and was not especially surprised to discover it almost without exception sucked. what surprised me was how much of it was "erotica," except it was actually outright porn. i hope you will not be offended that i do not acknowledge erotica as a thing, not as a thing that actually involves sex, anyway. (i saw a car commercial once that had no living beings in it, but the way they photographed the car was erotic.) everything people call erotica is soft porn. and you hit the nail on the head, at least one of its heads, as to why: the repetition of the vocabulary (not to mention the mechanics). the other head is pacing: one paragraph of hello how are you, six pages of heavy breathing and increasingly ridiculous names for body parts, half a paragraph of well that was fun, thanks and bye -- that's bad pacing and bad reading as you say. i redefined print porn at that time: anything that isn't about koreans or bells and uses the word "dong" outside of quotation marks is porn.

solution? well they're twofold. 1. write actual erotica, and don't put any actual intercourse in it. 2. give up and write porn.

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congrats