@Nickbeee -- Dude, no tripping here. Send this piece to a genuine publisher and see where it goes. So, I ask you point blank, aside from those who "love your work", what is your publishing history? One of the things I always point out to aspiring writers is, never have family, friends, and others close to you do your beta reading. Perhaps those you hang with do love your work, but I wouldn't publish this particular piece.

Because of the word play I saw in it, I know you have potential. Show me something else.

@evidentialist Mate I do it for fun ... My history is just in performing as a hobby and I want nothing to do with your commercial crap lol ... I have performed with for one John Sinclair .. (Kick our the Jams Mother fuckers) - -with people who have performed with Sun Ra Arkestra the Jazz masters. . I could honestly just go on and and on and on .. leave it ... shut up - crawl back into your ego dude lol.

@evidentialist I truly respect you have worked hard and done a lot .. but you have no right to assume anything you have or ever speak to anyone that way.. You are disrespectful and brash.

@Nickbeee -- Neither is true. Open and honest to wannabe writers, those who are working in the field, and those who do it for fun. Anyone who endeavors to write creatively owes it to themselves to be open to criticism in an effort to improve their craft. As for speaking the way I do, I have every right, just as you have every right to disagree or ignore -- your choice.

I am not a wannabe writer - you are constantly devaluing .. health reasons are the main reason it hasn't been furthered @evidentialist - do you imagine you can give me a brain transplant as that is pretty much what it would take! ? You have no right... I repeat .. you speak in ignorance !!

@Nickbeee -- And you don't dispel my ignorance so that we can communicate. If you want to be understood you need to provide information. And let's stop using the dramatic "...have no right..." line. I have every right.

@evidentialist i have no need to justify anything to you. You have already shown your level. I have looked at your writing and its vapid and hollow imo. I am a proven artist. The above piece is firstly lyrical not a poem as you assumed. It follows complex musical timing you don't understand so you missinterpret it completed. What can i honestly learn from you? I honestly have no interest .. you need to firstly look into neurodiversity. You approach is not inclusive and displays a fair chunk of ignorant as i have said, not only to people but art and where music lyricsm & poetry marry or interlink. I have no need to justify or explain anything to you. From feedback i already have i know my writing is highly developed and not only that, due to set or specific neurological condition. You are very needy. You need to let this conversation go before you further emabarass yourself. You have judged me on one piece of music you thought was a poem alone. It's kinda both and not only uses complex timing changes you don't get is loved and has many supportive comments where it is posted. Comments from leading musician in the uk music industry. You are a dinosaur who has missjudged this situation based on a set of values and predujices born from dead values. You have nothing to offer to me. This much is clear. Good luck ?

@Nickbeee -- I didn't think of it as a poem alone and I didn't ask you for justification. I asked you for information. My dad was a successful songwriter in Hollywood. He and I worked together. I worked in and around the music business for years. I worked as a performer, musician, and singer. I understand a little something about music and meter and lyrical value.

I did not attack you personally. You chose to take it that way. What I got in response was ad hominem and whining -- and you persist. Why?